Richard III Screenplay

Hi,

I'm writing a script for a film following Richard's 2 year reign and
until the Battle of Stoke in 1487. The Film is actually in 3 parts,
the first part ends with the death of Richard's son, for which I've
written a 1st draft and trying to make changes on the 2nd draft. I
really need some help with dialogue and character development! If
anyone would be able to read through the script and suggest some
changes I'd really appreciate it. (By the way I'm portraying 'Good
King Richard' not another Shakespeare tyrant -of course!)

thanks
Mim